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Grab Your Passport and My Hand -
Unfortunately the story felt too clunky and I was unable to finish it. Using “you” rather than the characters name was off putting and didn’t make for a natural reading experience.
Ashton’s language was so wordy and really said nothing. It was confusing.
Using a first person POV, but in past tense also didn’t feel natural.
I know the story is AI generated and it read like that and didn’t hold my interest. I’m sorry.